Hmmm, I'd give it a B-. A somewhat coherent collective of thoughts, but spends too much time dwelling on the negative, when there is supposed to be an overall positive message to this essay. I'd tell my past self to rewrite this, but he doesn't listen to me
Tech Age: An Essay on Technology Dependence by Michael Rauser
Society today has been transformed by the advancement of technology, especially in recent years. From the invention of the computer to creating a music player the size of a quarter, technology has moved in leaps and bounds for the past twenty years. But is technology advancing too quickly? Are new inventions becoming so indispensable that the very idea of several days, let alone weeks, away from them is simply ludicrous to most people? These questions and more we shall explore in today’s essay.
Convenience and entertainment are the main driving force behind most technology today. Thanks to the incredible advancements, tasks that used to take hours can be performed in minutes. It is because of this that we expect that kind of speed and efficiency in all areas of our life, even entertainment. Or perhaps I should say especially entertainment. All the ad campaigns for new computers and internet services always say the same thing: faster. So much time and energy is spent trying to minimize the amount of time and energy spent looking for entertainment.
Personal privacy is no longer something that is of great importance to people today. While we can choose which photographs we upload to public web sites like MySpace and what we’ve written on our Twitter and which friend requests we accept on Facebook, it’s impossible to completely safeguard our identity. Surprisingly, this seems to be something that people are somewhat comfortable with. People understand the risk of sharing personal information on Facebook or keeping photos that they’d prefer to keep secret on their mobile phone’s camera, but do it regardless. The freedom that technology permits is more important to them than the potential risk of their secrets becoming common knowledge. Rational thoughts and common sense seem lost in this age of constant communication.
But despite all this constant connection with other people, kids today are some of the angriest, discontented, and miserable kids in history. Depression, suicide, and shooting sprees are all things that seem to be natural occurrences among today’s youth and yet this generation are the most connected and well off as far as conveniences and entertainment. The reason for this is that electronic connection, despite popular opinion, is no substitute for actual human interaction something becoming more and more rare. In fact it is not uncommon at all to see young children today willingly give up the chance to interact with an actual person in order to text message someone miles away. Even more surprising (but also not rare) is when someone will text message a person who is in the same building as them. However, I am not saying that Technology is solely to blame for this. It does have its part, but the real problem lies with people themselves. As I said before many children today will choose electronic interaction instead of personal face to face interaction all by themselves. With electronic interaction, you cannot create a meaningful and lasting friendship at all; all you can do is find people who have similar interests as yours.
The thing that is most interesting about modern technology is how indispensable it is. Fifteen years ago, there was no such thing as cellphones and now they are considered an essential part of any trip no matter how short. (From five weeks to five minutes) You might tell that I don’t think much of text messaging. First of all it has caused kids to become even lazier in their writing than ever; spelling and grammar are old fashioned things that aren’t necessary anymore. It is also completely pointless. They are holding a phone in their hands! Why not just call their friends instead of sending them indecipherable messages. It’s the modern equivalent of passing notes. (Just think, only ten years ago kids still used to perform such an old tradition) That's not to say there is no practical application for text messaging, but it is a degrading experience altogether.
Despite the many downsides of modern technology, it is still more useful and convenient than ever. In fact I am even writing this essay on my laptop while I eat lunch. Technology has advanced to a wonderful state and in the future it will continue to become even better than it is today. And just like today new inventions will have their disadvantages. But in the end, life is made much more efficient and enjoyable by the many amazing developments in technology.